Cain’s Mother-in-Law

I am testing out pitches for my new novel Cain’s Mother-in-Law.  Please read the three samples below and let me know:

  • Which would most likely get you to buy my novel.
  • Which you think would get the most buyers (if different from your first answer).

Please note that a potential interested party is asking that my pitch contain a reference to a similar existing novel (The Red Tent), so I have no choice on that, but any other comment is welcome. Please leave comments in Facebook or here.

Here are the pitches (in alphabetical order):

Pitch A A mother-in-law’s guilt trip through the biblical world of The Red Tent. This is a world where Adam and Eve are runaways, not God’s special creation. Where the story of Adam’s rib is a bawdy joke. Where Cain is an unthinking teen whose flight from guilt lands him in the real world where he finds real people, real hatred . . . and girls. Cain’s Mother-in-Law – a story of life after you kill your brother.
Pitch B No, Cain’s life did not begin with that kiss in the dark. He had a history, and her mother would never let him forget that. Nor would the ghost of his brother Abel whom he murdered in a fit of anger. In this guilt trip through the biblical world of The Red Tent, Cain learns that, if he wants the girl, he first has to win over her mother . . . and his own. Cain’s Mother-in-Law – a story of life after you kill your brother.
Pitch C Who knew there were people outside of Eden? Not Cain. These were the “others” that little brother Abel teased him about before Cain did what most older brothers only dream of doing. In this guilt trip through the biblical world of The Red Tent, Cain learns that, if he wants the girl, he first has to win over her mother . . . and his own. Cain’s Mother-in-Law – a story of life after you kill your brother.